Fanfic-thingy revise!

REVISED King of the Underworld.
The King of the Underworld sat on his throne, looking around in his throne room. It was dark and gloomy, composed almost entirely of black marble and obsidian. A few guards stood near the entranceway.
The King was lost in thought.
Suddenly, he sat up.
“Everybody, move the castle to an alternate location. There are intruders incoming,” he said in a calm tone.
The King stood up and walked out of his throne room. He walked through the hallways of his gloomy castle, then exited the premises and watched as his castle faded into nothingness as it transported itself.
“Now,” he said to himself, “let’s see who these intruders are.”
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“What?!” the entire party, sans Zeru, exclaimed.
“That’s correct. I say we venture on another expedition to the Underworld,” he replied.
Royke, initially surprised, calmed down in demeanor and tone. “You’re team leader. Where you go, I will follow. May I ask why, however?”
“Yeah, tell me why!” Antlan said boisterously. “I hate that place! It looks like someone’s internal organs!”
“I side with Zeru on this, because he has shown quite the ability at making rational and smart decisions,” Serene said calmly.
“Simply, we cannot take the risk. As we are currently searching for the stars of Day and Night, we cannot risk anything happening. An unknown person told us something has reappeared there. We simply cannot risk there being yet another attack. You all do remember what happened when Hein got his hands on the core, right?” Zeru explained.
Antlan calmed down a bit. “Yeah, who wouldn’t remember those dark days?”
“Therefore, I summarize that we must attack first. I have no doubts in the fighting prowess of our group. If we can prevent unnecessary numbers from forming a large group in front of our base, it’s all for the better,” Zeru concluded.
Royke nodded, steadily seeing the logic. “If we strike first and strike true, that could land us an advantage if there is another attack.”
“If worst comes to worst,” Zeru said, “we can always use the Amulet to tell Lenna and the others of the enemy forces. Foreknowledge is quite vital in the large-scale battles we’ve seen recently.”
“Very well then,” Serene said. “Shall we be off?”
Zeru nodded and picked up their knapsacks from the nearby table. They walked toward the portal they created with their Amulet. They walked into it, and warped immediately to Hein’s Throne Room.
Zeru walked over to Hein’s throne, where there was a portal to the Underworld. He walked into it, and the rest of the party followed suit.
After the battle with Hein, a portal directly to the site of the battle was constructed. The heroes took that portal, instead of the long, roundabout way through the actual Underworld.
They walked into the site of the final battle, where they had valiantly fought and defeated Hein.
“This place brings back a lot of memories,” Royke said.
Antlan laughed. “If any of them were good, tell me!”
Serene giggled. “What about the time Zeika fooled us with those cup noodles?”
There was a general chorus of laughter at the jibe.
Suddenly, a gleam caught Antlan’s eye. He turned around and looked at it.
The Netherworld’s walls emitted light naturally, so if there was a polished object, it would most likely gleam. He walked up the steps and walked to the left.
On the ground was a small, rounded gem the size of an apple. Antlan picked it up. It was a perfect sphere and it was deep blue.
“What might this be?” he asked himself.
The rest of the party walked up to him.
“Did you find anything, Antlan?” Zeru asked.
Antlan held out the gem for the party members to examine. They all looked at it.
“It doesn’t seem like a sapphire or aquamarine...,” Antlan speculated.
Zeru frowned in thought for a moment, and then decided his course of action. “Let us not dwell on this. I’ll put this in my knapsack so Athena can examine it later.”
The rest of the party agreed, and Zeru slipped the gem into his knapsack.
Suddenly, there was a great rumbling. The floor shook beneath the feet of the heroes. This unbalanced them and made them trip.
“Everybody, get down! It’s an earthquake!” Antlan exclaimed.
Just as sudden as it had started, it stopped. However, one thing had changed.
Zeru pointed at the middle of the platform on which they had defeated Hein. There was a new portal there.
“I assume this is what our informant was speaking of?” Royke asked.
“Only one way to find out,” Zeru decided, walking toward it.
The four heroes entered the portal, and suddenly, they were back into the disgusting-looking walls of the underworld.
“I thought we were finished with this scenery!” Antlan complained. Serene tapped him on the head.
“Well, our lives were never easy. We’ve saved the world twice, and we didn’t get warm beds and fresh food every night,” she said.
“I know, but after that, don’t you think we should just relax?” Antlan protested, unyielding in his argument.
“We’re here already. Do you want to be a coward and run back to the base?” Royke said, a bit mockingly.
Immediately, Antlan straightened up and changed his tone to one of confidence. “Of course I won’t! I am ready for anything!”
Royke chuckled. “So long as you are, Antlan, so long as you are.”
Zeru, however, was not participating in this conversation. Instead, he had walked forward and was currently looking at a small blue flame.
The rest of the party noticed it too, and quickly walked up to Zeru.
“What’s that?” Antlan asked.
Serene sighed. “Don’t ask stupid questions. If we knew, we wouldn’t be here.”
“Sorry,” Antlan said, his pride slightly wounded.
Zeru walked up to the flame. However, before he touched it, a voice called out to him.
“Hey Zeru,” Antlan said, “Don’t die! We don’t want Lenna as a leader!”
Serene elbowed Antlan in the ribs.
“What? Are you telling me you want him to die? Hey Zeru, Serene’s a traitor!” Antlan said.
“I am not!” Serene exclaimed. “I am the most loyal to Zeru, mind you.”
“Is someone falling for him?” Antlan said in a mocking voice.
“Shut up!” Serene said immediately.
Before the argument could drag on, Royke spoke up. “Would the two of you kindly shut your mouth so we can get this over with?”
Zeru nodded to Royke. “Thank you.”
Royke saluted. “I’m just doing my job.”
Zeru prodded the flame experimentally.
Suddenly, the flame erupted into the air. The small bit of fire became a gigantic inferno. Zeru quickly backpedaled to join the rest of his comrades in watching it.
When the flames cleared, a man wearing a mask and holding an axe walked out.
“Who might you be?” Zeru challenged.
The man seemed to shrug. “I should ask you, seeing how you’re intruding in my domain.”
“Your domain...you’re the King of the Underworld?!” Serene exclaimed, connecting the dots in an instant.
“You catch on quickly, mortal. Yes, I am. I have ruled this place for millennia, and no humans have dared intrude in my domain. And yet you four are standing in front of me. You are very brave, very strong, or very stupid,” he said.
Antlan laughed. “Can we say all of the above?”
“So why are you here?” he asked.
“We were searching for possible enemy aggression. However, since we are all here...I believe it is time for the greatest challenge of all. King of the Underworld, I, Zeru, challenge you to a fight!” Zeru said.
Antlan scratched his head. “I need some exercise anyway.”
Royke shrugged. “Shooting apples off of trees is getting boring. It’s time for some real fighting!”
Serene sighed. “As you wish, I guess.”
“Then it’s decided! Do you accept?” Zeru asked.
The King of the Underworld laughed. “I accept, mortal! Do not underestimate me!”
Zeru immediately started issuing orders. “Serene, Royke, stay on the back lines. Antlan, try and get behind him and sneak off a few Phantom Throws. I’ll keep him occupied.”
The King of the Underworld charged. Zeru ran up to him and parried a crushing blow with his axe with his sword. Royke, however, waited for openings to shoot. He did not wish to accidentally strike Zeru.
Zeru frowned after each parry. The King was strong, but he lacked the crushing blows of other enemies he’d faced.
Suddenly, he raised his axe into the air and it became enveloped in a bright red aura.
“Omega Dragon Crusher!” he exclaimed.
He tried to slam his axe into the ground, but Zeru faithfully lifted his sword up in a parry, and the axe only struck his sword. Zeru took the preponderance of the damage, while Serene used a Magic Wall to shield herself and Royke from the shockwave.
Zeru, however, was still relatively unscathed even after taking a direct hit.
Suddenly, all of the members of the party began getting an uneasy feeling—as if the blood inside their veins were rushing erratically.
“It’s Blood Bending! Everybody, streamline yourself according to the spell!” Zeru called out.
Zeru’s blood suddenly started pulling him back, and instead of resisting, he stepped back a few paces until his blood settled.
He then returned to combat with the King, who was losing energy quickly.
Antlan called out to Zeru. “You know the drill!”
Zeru nodded to note he got the message. He went on the offense, using Cutdown, then after the King parried it, used Blade Impact on the King. It made him flinch a bit, but before the King could react, a few fast-moving stars cut straight into his back.
Zeru moved back to inspect his handiwork.
“Was that all?” Royke asked in disbelief.
Suddenly, the King pulled out the stars from his chest. All of his wounds started knitting themselves together and the King’s outfit changed: his axe became more ornate and his hat changed as well.
“I’m not finished yet!” he exclaimed, then charged Zeru again.
Zeru quickly cast Aegis Barrier to take the hit, and then used the moment of temporary confusion to leap to one side and use Insightful Slash on the King’s side. He lashed out with his Axe, but Zeru stepped back to dodge it.
Royke used a Soul Piercer at this moment and the King braced himself with his axe. However, while the axe blocked some of the attack’s destructive potential, it still dealt great damage.
Antlan leaped into the air, positioning himself at the King’s zenith. He threw stars down in a Phantom Throw while Royke used another Soul Piercer and Serene casted Sword of Faith.
Unfortunately for the King, he chose Sword of Faith as the least destructive attack and took it in full...and promptly got destroyed.
Once again, the King regenerated himself and changed his outfit.
He started this time by calling out a familiar spell.
“Thunder Storm!” he exclaimed.
Black clouds gathered around in the room, and lightning started cracking down from the sky. It was aimed exclusively at Antlan. It hit him, and he fell to the ground in a smoldering mess.
“Brother!” Serene exclaimed in worry.
The King of the Underworld started running toward Antlan.
“Omega Dragon Crusher!” he exclaimed, firing a shockwave at the defenseless Antlan.
Almost in a flash, Serene appeared in the wave’s path.
“Magic Shield!” she exclaimed. A circular barrier of energy formed in front of her. The shockwave was powerful and it broke her barrier, but the barrier absorbed most of the force and Serene was hit for minimal damage. Zeru quickly drank an Elixir and Royke fired a Soul Piercer to gain the King of the Underworld’s attention.
The arrows struck him square in the back, and he turned around. Almost instantaneously, Zeru rushed in and started attacking. He used Final Blast to temporarily daze the enemy, and then struck him with an Insightful Slash. The King still held on, however, and tried to use Omega Dragon Crusher at point blank on Zeru. Before he could, however, a gigantic green sword pierced his chest. Serene and Antlan waved to Zeru, both fully healed by Serene’s healing spells.
The King of the Underworld once again returned, but this time, two servants accompanied him.
“Royke, go for the Archer servant. Serene and Antlan, you two deal with the other servant. I’ll keep the King busy,” Zeru commanded.
Zeru started parrying the king’s strikes, hoping to buy his friends enough time.
Royke began firing at the Archer servant using Soul Piercer, but more often than not, the enemy’s own Blood Piercer countered the arrows.
Royke used Quicken, and multiple images of him appeared, all flashing inconsistently. However, the enemy archer simply used Blood Rain to hit all the possible clones. To the enemy’s surprise, however, all of the attacks seemed to miss. Too late, he realized his fatal flaw, and turned around, just to be hit directly in the head by a Soul Piercer. For good measure, Royke finished with an Arrow Rain.
Antlan started fighting the other Servant by using Shadow Assaulter, which barraged him from all sides. Serene used Sword of Faith, and before long, the servant seemed defeated. However, it became enveloped in a green light, and it seemed revitalized, casting Cold World on Serene and Antlan.
Suddenly, out of nowhere, Zeru executed a Ninety-Nine Slashes of the Fire Dragon attack on the servant. When Zeru finished attacking, Serene and Antlan dealt the coup de grace with their attacks.
The party then focused their attention on the King. Antlan used Ninety-Nine Stabs of the Ice Dragon while Royke used Ninety-Nine Shots of the Thunder Dragon to defeat him.
The King fell over again, but he regenerated yet again. This time, however, his mask dissolved.
He started by calling an unfamiliar spell. “Red Pillar!”
Many beams of red light started shooting up from the ground. However, the party was skilled at dodging and managed to weave through the beams. Unfortunately, Royke, who mistimed a step, got engulfed by a beam and screamed in agony.
Antlan looked pained. “We have to stop him!”
Serene nodded. “Leave it to me!” She cast a Magic Pillar spell and the King was momentarily distracted, stopping the Red Pillar onslaught. Zeru went in for the attack and Antlan augmented Zeru’s attacks, while Serene used a Phoenix Feather to revive Royke.
“Thanks,” Royke said.
Serene nodded and joined in the battle. Zeru continually attacked, but the King seemed wary of his tactics, blocking both him and Antlan’s attacks. Royke suddenly had an idea.
“Serene, use Magic Pillar on the King,” he said.
Serene looked confused. “Why? He won’t fall for it twice.”
“Just do it,” he said.
Serene obliged and used Magic Pillar. However, the King knew this was coming and nimbly sidestepped it, wrecking Antlan and Zeru’s rhythm of attacks. Before he could take advantage of this, however, he was shot by three glowing yellow arrows, courtesy of Royke. Royke had charged a Soul Piercer during the Magic Pillar and the Magic Pillar cloaked this movement, allowing a clean shot.
Zeru and Antlan then finished the King off.
The King lay on the ground, unmoving for some time.
“Are we finally done?” Zeru asked, panting.
“That was a vicious battle,” Antlan agreed.
Suddenly, a blazing red aura engulfed the King.
“I...SHALL...NOT...LOSE...TO...MORTALS,” he said.
The red aura engulfed him, and when he appeared, he was wearing a new hat, new armor, had a new axe, had glowing red eyes, and had a pair of glowing orange wings, much like the ones the Dark Order members used in their Soul of Pain forms.
“Life Spawn: End of Time!” he yelled.
The scenery became a blur of places and times long forgotten. First they saw themselves fighting Hein in the Underworld, then the Dark Order members. Then they were traversing the Red World. Next, they were back fighting Reyka. After that, they were fighting Zure again.
“What in the blazes is going on?” Royke asked. The shifting scenery also caused uneven footing, so the heroes frequently tripped.
“He’s trying to push us into the End of Time! When we hit the place where nothing existed, we’ll die!” Serene exclaimed, panicked.
Zeru frowned defiantly. “I must stop him!”
Zeru tried desperately to run toward the king, but instead, he was brutally levitated into the air, and then smashed into the ground. His knapsack ripped, and the blue jewel Antlan retrieved earlier reacted with the white space.
The scenery immediately changed back to that of the Underworld. Serene cast a healing spell on Zeru, who got up in an instant.
“HOW DID YOU...,” the King said, but Zeru wasted no words. He immediately tried to hurt him, to no avail. The sword barely dented his body. Zeru stepped back and regrouped with his party.
“Omega Dragon Crusher!” the King said.
“Aegis Barrier!” Zeru responded.
Zeru’s barrier blocked the Dragon Crusher.
“What do we do know? He’s nigh-invincible!” Antlan said.
“We might have to Charge,” Antlan said.
“I’ll keep him busy as always, but I don’t know how long I can last,” Zeru said.
“Let’s go then,” Royke said.
Zeru ran up to the King and started blocking his attacks. However, the King used Red Pillar.
This one was only one beam, however, and Zeru easily dodged it.
A green-and-yellow sword pierced the King. Right after that, three yellow-coated stars hit him, and then thick yellow arrows struck him. Zeru was about to deal the finishing blow, but the King called out a healing spell.
“Healing Arts: Salve!”
The King then used another Omega Dragon Crusher.
Zeru parried it, but he was quickly tiring. The King knew this, and saw his advantage. He continually used Omega Dragon Crusher on the gradually weakening Zeru. More arrows and spells crashed into him, but they hardly dented him.
Then, Zeru’s guard broke. He was left completely defenseless in the face of an Omega Dragon Crusher.
“Omega Dragon Crusher!” he exclaimed.
Suddenly, Zeru was shoved aside...
...By Serene, who had a Magic Wall up. The blow easily shattered the wall and sent her flying. Before anyone could react, he used Red Pillar to intercept Serene’s flight path.
“No!” Antlan exclaimed. He looked at the King of the Underworld.
“You don’t touch my sister. You can hurt me, you can kill me, you can main me or burn me. But you will NOT touch my sister!” he exclaimed. He rushed forward.
“No, Antlan, don’t!” Royke exclaimed.
However, it was too late. After Antlan’s brutal attack, the King took him out with a Red Pillar. Royke and Zeru tried to run desperately to use a Phoenix Feather on them, but an Omega Dragon Crusher shockwave blocked their path.
“We only have one chance, Zeru. I’ll go ahead and buy you some time. You’ll need to finish this,” Royke said.
“Don’t be a fool, Royke,” Zeru said.
“You don’t be a fool, Zeru. Without proper time, we can’t take this guy out. I’ll buy some time,” Royke said. He was adamant about his position. Before he could dispute it any more, he rushed up to the King.
“Quicken!” he called.
A few mirror images popped up, and he used it to confuse the King while shooting him from behind. However, he was not fooled by these attacks and easily dispelled it with Omega Dragon Crusher, hitting the real Royke. Before Royke could react, he used Red Pillar in his devastating Combo.
“WHO’S LEFT?” he asked.
He expected to see a battle-weary, weak young warrior on the verge of defeat. Instead, he saw an angry, defiant warrior enveloped in red and yellow waves of energy.
“You hurt my friends. I’ve travelled with these companions through many adventures now. They mean more to me than anything. You struck them down carelessly,” Zeru said, in a steely calm.
“WHAT ABOUT IT?” the King asked.
“What, you ask? Why, you’ll learn to swallow your words,” Zeru said.
He roared and charged at the King. The King yelled “Light Magic: Dispel” and shot a white field of light at Zeru.
However, Zeru, lightning fast, dodged the field as if he were teleporting. The King knew dispelling him was hopeless, so he charged as well.
Axe and Sword collided. Zeru’s sheer willpower versus the King.
The Berserker Vow and the Charge he used gave him strength, but it was quickly fading.
“This isn’t for me. This is for my friends,” he reminded himself.
He pushed forward and knocked the axe away, then instantaneously stabbed the sword into the King.
“WHAT? NO! I CAN’T BE DEFEATED! NOT...BY...YOU...,” he exclaimed, exploding into a million small embers.
Zeru then fell into the ground, face-first.
~~
Zeru opened his eyes. The first things he saw were the caring eyes of all of his teammates.
“Where am I?” he asked, disoriented.
“The Base,” Hakura explained. “We traced where you went with your Amulet and found all four of you exhausted. We healed you guys, but you slept the longest. You looked like you were really worn out.”
“We heard what happened. It was pretty neat. Considering how you guys all survived, you pretty much just defeated the King of the Underworld! Nice job,” Zure said.
“Thanks, guys,” Zeru said.
He noticed an odd black robe covering him. “What’s this?”
“We found this on you when we found you. It’s apparently extremely strong and gives you good boosts. A great armor, if I may say so,” Zeika said.
“I do wonder if the King is alright, though,” Zeru pondered.

loled @ “I hate that place! It looks like someone’s internal organs!”
truestory

OH AND I SAW ZERU X SERENE IN THERE
YUS
good job :DDD
-details overload ftl-

really nice job on this neo!

I found this in the moment I started reading.

“What?!” the entire party, sans Zeru, exclaimed.

What's a 'sans'? o.o

I think sans means without.

myfantasy wrote:

I think sans means without.

Correct, Darren.

yep. i read a poem with sans in it.